later, ?? . Then it

?? , tearing open his tent Hebagfired. at the wolf a second time,

and again, it fell back

??

---- 狼（环境）

Mac 骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人（角色） 大战）

3) 时间依赖的发展

：决策变得紧急

如： 2017 年 6 月浙江英语高考： The car abruptly stopped in front of him. \ the car.\as the wolf was just two steps away and was about to tear Mac into pieces. What

a narrow escape! 骑车突停面前 --- 急喊上车 ---Max 上车避险 --- 饿狼近在咫尺 （此情此景，

刻不容缓）

4) 增加的障碍 ：人物角色必须克服挑战 , 以达到他们的目标

例如： 2018 年 6 月高考 But before we jumped off the horses, we found that we had been off the beaten track and got lost. We had no idea where we were and it got

dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. 马儿受惊 --- 草原迷路（障碍 心理恐慌（障碍

4）

1）---- 天色渐黑（障碍

小兔突现 ---

3）----

2）---- 又累又饿（障碍

方法 2. 放大内心冲突

放大内心冲突（你的角色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时 刻。

现在我们在来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的：

2016 年 10 月浙江高考： Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn't help crying, \ with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn't be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying. ”She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.

夫妇争吵 --- 独自行走 --- 荒野走散 --- 夜色渐黑 --- 独处森林 --- 阴森恐怖 --- 后悔莫及（内

心冲突的刻画）内心独白 （往昔对比 +虚拟语气使用 +旁边描写是常见技巧之 一）

方法 3. 使用环境描写增加不确定性

充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，具体方法可以看上期读后续写 微技能。当故事角色在碰到困难时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑 暗，恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。我们感受到了紧张的倍增。

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例 1： Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest( 黑暗 ). Even worse, the

temperature suddenly dropped dramatically. ( 寒冷）

例 2：It didn ’t take long for the forest to be enveloped in darkness（黑暗）. Her rasping breath steamed （寒冷） in the moonlight and her throat was parched from thirst.

浙江高考读后续写微技能 |12 种高分开头

1.

An adverb

he stepped over all the broken glass. he skipped up the street.

)Para1 ：But no more helicopters

came

Carefully, Joyfully

Para 1： (201610 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 and it was getting dark again.

Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the

forest. （时间副词衔接 +环境描写）

2. An adj. phrase

Curious to know what was inside, he tiptoed into the dark cave. Unable to say a word it was getting

, he was rooted to the spot.

)Para 1:

(201610 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录

dark again.

But no more helicopters came and

Desperate and hopeless , Jane knelt down, tears （并列情绪形容词）

)Para 2:

streaming down her face. up. for

(201610 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 It was daybreak when Jane woke

Weak as she was , she struggled to her feet, continuing searching

assistance. （状态形容词 +as/though 引导的倒装句） Suddenly a little

(201806 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 )Para 1: out in front

of my horse.

I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse. it got dark. back.

rabbit jumped small creature ,

Afraid that I might hurt the lovely

( 情绪形容词 +从句 )

(201806 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 )Para 2: We had no idea where we were and

Exhausted and hungry , I wondered if we could find our way

3. A participle (-ing or the door.

–ed word)

Looking around him cautiously,

he slipped into the room and softly

closed

Exhausted , he was glad the race was finally over.

(201610 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 ) Para1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.

Feeling disappointed ,

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Jane had to stay alone

for another night.

（现在分词 +情绪形容词）

(201610 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 ) Para 2: up. Feeling refreshed

4. A conjunction

It was daybreak when Jane woke

stream

to find

, she continued to walk along the

the way out. （现在分词 +状态形容词）

As he walked , he whistled

Although he was afraid

, he jumped right in.

5.

A prepositional phrase

he suddenly stopped.

At the end of the lane At the sight of the snake

, the little girl screamed at the top of her voice.

6. A dialogue or a monologue “Let ’s see who gets past Jenny.

there

first! ”

Rachel shouted,

as she pedaled fast and zoomed

“Hold on tight! ” Myfather yelled. Wejust finished

bucking in as the coaster jerked

into motion. This was my first roller coaster ride. (201706 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 )Para 1: him.

\

The car abruptly stopped in front of

Paul shouted at Mac.

7. A character

Mark is a studious boy who loves reading. His classmates often tease him for being too hardworking and they call him Mr. Smart. 8.

An emotion

One afternoon, while studying at home

?

The moment she saw how she did for her Science test, Tina ’s eyes and falling down her cheeks.

tears started welling up in

9.

A setting

I closed my eyes to enjoy the gentle breeze and the sounds of the clashing waves. Gently opening my eyes, I saw my parents taking

a relaxing stroll along

the beach.

The cave was dark and everything was silent. I couldn

’t even see my hand in front

of my face. I knew this adventure was going to be something that I would never forget. (201711 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 ) Para 2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. I looked out of the car window, winding rivers,

lofty mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys holding me entirely in their

fascination.

（视觉 +环境描写 +拟人）

10.

An action

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Furry

started wagging his tail and running around in circles when he saw his master

taking a leash out from the drawer. Furry was all ready for his evening walk. (201711 浙江高考读后续写范文摘录 ) Para 1:

The next day we remembered the brand-new

tent we had brought with us.

Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why not camp to

satisfy

Mom? （动作描写 +问句衔接）

11.

Sound effects

BOOM, CRASH! The wind was howling outside of my house. We were having a terrible thunder storm. I was very scared.

12. A question

Have you ever been on a self-driving

trip?

Let me tell you an exciting trip my family

took this summer.

Why does trouble always follow me around? Do I have a \or something?

fascination. （视觉 +环境描写 +拟人）

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